Tip #9 Combining sentences

•Isolates and numbers three sentences and asks you to judge which combination is correct
•A bad one is:
1.Missing information
2.Not a correct statement of relationship
3.Too long and uses unnecessary conjunctions
4.Too many conjunctions

The best choice is one that preserves the parts but uses as few words as possible

Example
•Anisha was born in England
•She is 13
•She now lives in Ottawa

1.Anisha was born in England but now lives in Ottawa
2.Anisha, a thirteen year old girl now lives in Ottawa because she was born in England
3.Anisha, 13, was  born in England but it is now the case that she lives in Ottawa
4.Anisha is a thirteen year old girl, and now lives in Ottawa and she was born in England.
The most efficient response might be:
5. Anisha, a thirteen year old girl living in Ottawa, was born in England